sion
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Post by sion on Mar 11, 2008 1:06:57 GMT -5
Id mostly just like for people to post what they think of my story, with any tips or hints for me. Also if you pick up on any spelling errors it would be great if you could point them out for me.
I would also like it if you could help me come up with a new title. "Fairy Realm" is a more of a working title but Id like to have a new one.
My ides so far are: True Magic Crystal of Fairy Power (hmm scratch that - it wont work) Path of Destiny
So as you read my story it would be great if you could tell me any titles that come to mind, to at least give me some ideas.
Thanks very much!!
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Post by Shinobi-Iri (nick) on Mar 11, 2008 8:04:41 GMT -5
I originally made this post on the actual story topic, but I'll put it here instead now that you've made a feedback thread.
I remember this from the old site, I also remember it being quite good. Keep up with it, I'll be interested to see more.
Nick.
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Post by Shinobi-Iri (nick) on Jun 4, 2008 8:57:00 GMT -5
Nice work Sion, you're a good writer so keep it up! I look forward to more of The Fairy Realm in the future.
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Post by Payrune on Jun 4, 2008 12:20:07 GMT -5
Nice work Sion, you're a good writer so keep it up! I look forward to more of The Fairy Realm in the future. lol that sounds so typical. I haven't had a chance to read it yet but I'll check out a chapter or two every now and then when I get a chance.
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Post by Shinobi-Iri (nick) on Jun 6, 2008 9:15:23 GMT -5
Nice work Sion, you're a good writer so keep it up! I look forward to more of The Fairy Realm in the future. lol that sounds so typical. I haven't had a chance to read it yet but I'll check out a chapter or two every now and then when I get a chance. It did seem a lot like a standard post here on PR didn't it? Oh well, I meant it didn't I? And that's why it counts so much...
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Post by sion on Jun 8, 2008 2:35:57 GMT -5
Thanks guys. Im slowing making headway with my story. Ill try to type faster and get it updated quicker.
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Post by sion on Dec 1, 2008 2:25:04 GMT -5
Well Ive posted another chapter. (Although I have a strange feeling no one is reading it, oh well nevermind)
The next couple of chapters are quite emotional so Ill try to get them done, so as to not keep all you (non-existant) readers in suspense!!
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Post by Shinobi-Iri (nick) on Dec 2, 2008 7:43:32 GMT -5
I assure you that you have readers, trust me on that one.
Should I be scared about this shotgun-toting Nick idea that you have?
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Post by sion on Dec 2, 2008 19:03:19 GMT -5
Thanks, its good to know that people are still reading it.
Haha only a little bit. You have a SPAS-12 shotgun, Liona (who is based on me) has a 9mm Glock and is extremely trigger-happy and Ari (Based on Roze) has a Smith & Wesson Chief's Special. For some reason everyone in my story has guns, even a bunch of 17-18 year old kids!!
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Post by Shinobi-Iri (nick) on Dec 2, 2008 22:21:45 GMT -5
Can I use a cat's head as a silencer?
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Post by sion on Dec 3, 2008 0:21:24 GMT -5
Haha Sure thing!!
Im almost up to the bit where they're heading out into the streets, and they all upgrade their guns, you to a Tommy Gun, Liona to a P90 SMG and Ari to a MP7 SMG!!
Oh and anyone else reading this who'd like to be in the story just say so! And if you have a preference for a weapon. (Their fighting zombies!!)
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Post by Shinobi-Iri (nick) on Dec 3, 2008 5:08:08 GMT -5
Can I have an AK-47 instead? I just want to be one big cliche...
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Post by sion on Dec 3, 2008 21:10:02 GMT -5
haha yeah sure!!
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Post by sion on Feb 20, 2009 22:27:57 GMT -5
Alright I have started redoing the chapters. Anyone who looks will notice that the first few will be longer and the numbers all out of order. Once Ive modified them all itll be fine!! Im also spacing the paragraphs as I usually use tabs and they dont show up on this site. Hopefully that will make it a lot easier for people to read. Ive only done the first two as thats all Ive got time for right now, Ill try to get the rest done soon as I can!
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Post by Shinobi-Iri (nick) on Mar 5, 2009 22:06:50 GMT -5
Nice to see some people still post here Sion, good work. I'll get around to reading what you've done soon, got some stuff to do for my uni course online today so I'll see if I can slot it in then. Don't give up on this place guys, we were going so strong for too long to do that. -Shinobi
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